Mon Nov 14, 2005 11:34 pm
Tue Nov 15, 2005 2:42 am
Tue Nov 15, 2005 11:08 am
Originally posted by Chacal
even though I resent her new boobless avatar.
Tue Nov 15, 2005 11:26 am
Tue Nov 15, 2005 11:40 am
Originally posted by Chacal
This is where I would usually berate young people for their shallowness and lack of concentration.
But in that particular case, I have to agree with Girl, even though I resent her new boobless avatar.
This essay is dry as the Sahara desert, and when you drag yourself up to the top of a dune, all you can see is other dunes ad infinitum.
What IS funny about your post is that it goes exactly against one of the essayist main theme, which is "accept your lot and trust your abilities".
Essays are often written in whatever litterary style was the current fashion at the time. Apparently in the early 1800s explaining simple ideas over and over again was in, or people were dumber than now, or both.
Girl, I suggest you condense each paragraph in one very short sentence. For example paragraph 3 can be summarized as "Trust yourself". Eliminate redundancies. Then discuss about what's left.
For further help about "Self-Reliance", may I suggest this link:
http://www.transcendentalists.com/self_reliance_analysis.htm
Be aware, though, that your teacher certainly knows all about that site.